Open Access to Suzie's Process

Her Final Project Process Menu:

Proposal

Research Proposal and Bibliography

Artist Profile - John Andrews (1st Draft alla Didion)

Artist Profile - John Andrews (Extended - Read this Draft)

Link to Research Interview with Jim Grant

Link to Convo with Heather, Sophia, and John

THE FINAL PROJECT

Conversations About Her Project:

Heather Harris - Re: Heather, Sophia, Suzie and Jon   4/24/02; 11:14:02 AM (reads: 439, responses: 0)

Suzie.....

Good start to your close look...I like how you open up with a lot of the artist...

But then I was comfused with the second paragraph...it wasn't clear to me at first that it was a memory of your audition...I first thought it would be a memory of your interview with him...you might want to transistion that a little clearer...

Also I find a lot of yourself in this...Is that what you are trying to do?? If it is then awesome...but if not then you might want to switch it around...I guess I'm just asking what type of style you are approaching in this...But I do think you need to put more of him in the close look...I am not sure how the rest of it goes or if there is more...but if there is you should expand on your point of environment and film making...why is he really back here? what made him come back? what can he get here that he cant other places? maybe expand more on these questions to allow the reader to know what you are really getting at....and most of all why is this important?? why does your director think this is important???

But I do really like your style..the narrative makes it interesting...good job I can't wait to see more

Sophia Walter - Re: Heather, Sophia, Suzie and Jon   4/24/02; 3:15:55 PM (reads: 436, responses: 0)

suzie- I like your close look #1...it's got a lot of quotes from your artist- it seems caught inbetween the two extreme styles that we were talking about in class- half pure interview and half pure commentary from Suzie. I'm not sure I feel comfortable reading it, though...i think that the textual ideas flow nicely, but I don't think that I feel a unity between your voice and your interviewee's voice- it seems a bit too separated a relationship. It seems a quarter written very formally for a newspaper, a quarter diary entry, and half (your interviewee's voice) personal reflection. I kind of think that there could be more union between you and your interviewee's responses. I like how your close look flows though...it's just a picky thing I noticed about changes in voice...your close look kept me interested throughout the whole thing. like heather- I can't wait to see more...it seems like, in contrast to your really cool newspaper articles, you are really throwing all these voices into this project...is it hard going from newspaper artswriting duties to this class?

Suzie Mozes - Re: Heather, Sophia, Suzie and Jon   4/28/02; 1:51:08 PM (reads: 414, responses: 0)

Heather and Sophia-

I'm sorry I've been a bit absent.  I'm feeling a bit overwhelmed, and have been working on drafts I have not been really proud to post.  Sophia, I find myself putting a lot of myself in all of my drafts, and keep trying not to, but it always seems to go in that direction.  I'm adding a lot more meet to it right now... I should have something posted after dinner.  I've decided that I shouldn't try to fight where my voice is going, as long as I keep my focus on the artist.  I will read your stuff asap and get back to you.  I apologize for slacking off on this conversation!

Suzie

  Suzie Mozes - Re: Heather, Sophia, Suzie and Jon   4/28/02; 4:14:10 PM (reads: 411, responses: 0) My Pathetic Excuse for a Post :

Artist Profile Extended--

 Okay... I am definitely at a wall... this has taken me literally five hours to write.... I've had it and I want out.  This is the best I have been able to create (which in my opinion is pathetic).  I think I've got to stop trying to write "great" and start just writing.... thus, this is just writing... erggghh

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"Community can't be stressed enough ... an artist can't work alone ... you need a community of peers," John Andrews uttered solemnly.  Sipping my chai latte, I glanced back at him over the brim of my paper cup.  Observing his downcast eyes, sagging head, and stooping, bony shoulders, I saw my first glimpse of self-doubt and anxiety in John.  I had never seen him like this - psychologically strung out.  His body seemed to cave in on itself as he hunched over the table.  I thought, "But you proved yourself wrong.  Correction: an artis can work alone, it just ain't easy... this is what it does to you."

This image completely contrasted against my first impression of him.  On a Sunday afternoon in January, I strode through the backdoor of the public library for my audition.  There was a glamour that sparkled around the situation.  Auditioning for an independent film

suzie,

i like the fact that your close look seems to be from your perspective as opposed to a boring subjective perspective.  after all, this is a "close look."  maybe if you could start with your impressions of him and then ween your way away from centering the look on you and start to center it on him?

               -jon

Heather Harris - Re: Heather, Sophia, Suzie and Jon   4/28/02; 8:48:12 PM (reads: 410, responses: 1)

Suzie...

I know how you are struggling...I can say there are times in this experience when I have hit a wall...I couldn't write my research component until I was in the perfect setting...even my second close look I had to be perfectly content sitting in my room listening to music...while the research was written one late night in Bi-hall in the computer lab with only about 4 other people in there...Its difficult and I never know when I can right...But I find a lot of ideas come to me when  least expect them...like at breakfast in the morning or while I'm running outside or when I'm about to go to sleep....

As far as your profile I still see a lot of you in it...maybe this is what you are trying to accomplish...I don't know...But a lot of it is from the "I" perspective...you are seeing him through your eyes and your opinions...Is this who he really is??? Would I agree if I was writing the same article...If I would then thats good...if not then you should think about this...also don't stress about it...just write...you will be fine...don't stress about it...take a day off or so and do something for yourself and then get back to it...most importantly...follow your heart....

Hey Guys-

If anybody is out there, if anybody is still around, it anybody has any braincells left, I wanted to say that I am proud of us!  We've made it through, and we are stronger people for it... heather, talk about Darwin's natural selection.  Anyway, i've posted my project on awz.  Jon, I'm having trouble finding your project.  Heather- it's come out beautifully!  Sophia-I constantly am amazed at your creativity... the format is so original!  Guys-have a wonderful summer and i will miss seeing your faces!

suzie

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